The first paragraph introduces the topic as the culinary changes that have taken place in one country over the span of a century. It also introduces the general conclusion but as you read the paper, that conclusion turns out to be somewhat untrue. The first sentence is sufficiently attention grabbing
“In spite of that, the Bengalis’ passion for their rich culinary traditions has ensured the fact that these traditions would survive globalization and remain mostly untouched”
I will either have to find more facts to support this thesis or just change it entirely. This paper has ended up showing more dissimilarities than similarities.
Also, after a second reading, the paper is definitely not well organized. Each paragraph does make a relevant point distinct from what’s been covered but the paragraphs themselves have been placed in a seemingly random order.
I could not see any issues with the clarity or style.
The biggest problem with this paper is that there are no citations at all. The references used still need to be identified and listed properly.
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